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Title: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on January 28, 2011, 04:43:22 PM
Ok, so this is my first attempt at a fanfic. It isn't the best, but here goes.



Leviathan Fanfic

Alek could feel the violent shudders underneath his feet as the flares pelted the side of the Leviathan. He struggled with the unwieldy controls on the engine, fighting to keep balance with Klopp. Normally he wasn’t allowed out of his chambers, but those stupid engineers for the ship still hadn’t master the techniques enough to controls the air beast during an attack. So Alek was left in charge of the left side of the Leviathan.
   Sparks flew in every direction, shocking his arms even through his protection. Oil stained his finger tips. Screams filtered to his ears from the spine, sending tingles down his spine. But his top concern had to be the engines; without them, the Leviathan would be stranded in mid-air.
   A sudden explosion ripped through the rattling of the gears and pistons. That had better be one of the German spotters going down. If it wasn’t……he wasn’t going to think about that.
   With a screech, the remaining spotters skittered away. The throttle turned blue. Alek heaved a great sigh of relief as he eased on the saunter. It was over. No more deaths to hear with perfect clarity, no more cries of wounded soldiers……sometimes he wondered if he would ever be used to this ugly war.
   He and Baurer commented calmly on the multiple problems with the saunters that needed to be addressed to make the Leviathan engineer’s lives easier. So there was that balance problem, the timing problem, the gears and pistons might crack in the cold, of course those idiots might break the saunters by pushing the pedal at the wrong time, oh, and on that matter, the pedals needed adjusting on the height……
   Alek was interrupted by the shrill whistle declaring that all hand to the spine. He supposed he was included in the hands. Quickly he stumbled out into the great air beast. He scrambled up the iron stairs and started the climb up to the spine. A small ruckus converted his attention. Bovril was somehow loose in the ship and of course he was ‘becoming more precipitous’, as Dr. Barlow always said. So he scooped the furry creature up and stepped onto the spine.
   It was a wreck. Bodies lay everywhere, some moaning, and some lay deathly still. Alek wanted to close his eyes. The sickly and eerie sounds of agony sent his stomach down to his feet. Just keep walking, he told himself. But he couldn’t tear his eyes from the bodies. All of them had families, people who loved them, maybe children, and now they were gone forever. The families will probably get an abrupt and brief explanation of what happened, from a complete stranger.  
   One soldier, he noticed was wearing a sloppily made bead bracelet, maybe from a child. One was wearing a locket which could have pictures of loved ones in it. Another body was sporting a strangely tailored uniform, just like the one Dylan always wore…
   Suddenly Alek was running. Running towards that body that couldn’t be his best friend. No, no, no, was all he thought. It must be another person. Not invulnerable Dylan.
   He knelt down next to the crumpled figure. Spotting a whistle, he clumsily blew the familiar notes he had heard come the various crew and, occasionally, Bovril. It would take some time for a doctor to find them, Alek reckoned, and Dylan might need fast attention.
    Alek pushed his panic back. He had to. For Dylan. Ok, he thought. What is the most pressing problem? Well that was easy. Any wounds. A quick check over the showing skin revealed nothing, and most of the…blood…was coming from under the shirt. He steeled himself for any gore, and peeling back the shirt. But there was already a bandage around his chest. Alek frowned. He didn’t think that Dylan had any earlier injuries to speak of. Studying the wrappings more closely, he noticed that there was a strange curve to them, an almost feminine touch. And now he realized that the rest of the body was oddly curvy too. Not like a boy’s at all. More like…oh no.
   Bovril scampered up to Alek’s shoulder. “Mr. Sharp,” he said with a giggling sound.
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Post by: FleaBird6 on January 28, 2011, 06:07:35 PM
Hi! I haven't seen you yet!

Good story! Interesting, too! Does Deryn live! Yes, I am using exesive exclimation points!
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Post by: Bea-la on January 28, 2011, 11:09:04 PM
I love your fic!!!!
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Post by: MacK on January 29, 2011, 12:15:30 AM
ditto this is REALLY good!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on January 29, 2011, 02:01:33 AM
Thanx! I was really nervous about putting it out there. I'm glad you liked it!
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Post by: Sprocket on January 29, 2011, 05:29:12 AM
Look at the back of your copy of Behemoth. Now we know why the "Mister" in "Mister Sharp". Is italicized.

 Deryn must eat bovril, he knows too much.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 29, 2011, 07:12:57 AM
Please say deryn dies. Please?
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Post by: FleaBird6 on January 29, 2011, 07:39:05 AM
Deryn is to awesome to die :D

Would you rather be awesome or aweful? Think about that.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 29, 2011, 07:41:21 AM
Depends on the circumstances. Sometimes, awful. Why?
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Post by: Hope-la on January 29, 2011, 07:43:47 AM
Wow, that's great! Keep it up. I really want to see where it goes!!
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Post by: FleaBird6 on January 29, 2011, 07:45:38 AM
Depends on the circumstances. Sometimes, awful. Why?
AweFULL
AweSOME

Haha haha... yeah. lame. (The jokeish thing, NOT THE STORY. STORY=AWEFUL :D
sorry, couldn't resist carring on the lame jokish thing...
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 29, 2011, 07:47:01 AM
okay... still not totally getting it.
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Post by: FleaBird6 on January 29, 2011, 07:50:36 AM
AweFUL- very FULL of awe inspiringiness
AweSOME- SOMEawe inspiringyness.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 29, 2011, 07:52:26 AM
whatever
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Post by: Seven on January 29, 2011, 09:35:20 AM
I like this story and I like the way Alek found out about Dylan.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 29, 2011, 09:37:24 AM
I hope Dylan dies. Then it would be perfect.
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Post by: danakairi on January 29, 2011, 11:30:07 AM
I hope Dylan dies. Then it would be perfect.
*narrows eyes* I hate you.  >:\

(Just kidding)
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Post by: leviathanseries on January 29, 2011, 12:48:22 PM
This was great!! You should write a continuation... like a part II! It'd be awesome! :D
Fantastic!
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Post by: NetherBrood on January 29, 2011, 01:27:09 PM
This is my thought but it would be better if you keep it with out a continuation of it, because (by my opinion) some people tend to over think it some times and that will sometimes ruin it.
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Post by: By_the_Books on January 30, 2011, 07:39:28 AM
I like it. I think you should keep it like it is, cause it makes a good little drabble, and allows us to imagine what happens next.
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Post by: NetherBrood on January 30, 2011, 08:33:07 AM
I hope Dylan dies. Then it would be perfect.

That would be a great way to end Goliath, because if Dylan dies then all thats left would be Deryn and if that does happen then Alek would find out who Deryn is. (sorry if i don't make sence).
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Post by: Seven on January 30, 2011, 08:38:03 AM
I get it. Like if "Dylan" dies, or at least Alek think he does. Yes, no?
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Post by: NetherBrood on January 30, 2011, 09:19:01 AM
I get it. Like if "Dylan" dies, or at least Alek think he does. Yes, no?
If Dylan dies then all that would be left is Deryn
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 30, 2011, 11:17:59 AM
I just want Deryn to die, okay? NO hidden meaning or whatever.
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Post by: NetherBrood on January 30, 2011, 02:00:29 PM
I just want Deryn to die, okay? NO hidden meaning or whatever.

ok i get your point now.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 30, 2011, 02:04:10 PM
Derybn is annoying, and no one ever writes fanfic where she dies. It annoys me, but I'm too lazy to write fanfic myself.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on January 30, 2011, 02:19:41 PM
Actually, there are some fics on Fanfiction.net where Deryn dies. I won't say which ones, because I don't want to spoil anything.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 30, 2011, 02:21:49 PM
I couldn't find them. Can you post the links or pm them to me or something?
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Post by: danakairi on January 31, 2011, 08:12:07 AM
Derybn is annoying, and no one ever writes fanfic where she dies. It annoys me, but I'm too lazy to write fanfic myself.

I don't understand how a character who was intended to not be annoying could be annoying...
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 31, 2011, 09:49:00 AM
I dunno, but she is.
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Post by: tridecagirl on January 31, 2011, 09:49:35 AM
Derybn is annoying, and no one ever writes fanfic where she dies. It annoys me, but I'm too lazy to write fanfic myself.

IDIDITIDIDITIDIDIT!
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 31, 2011, 09:54:24 AM
Oooh where?
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Post by: tridecagirl on January 31, 2011, 10:21:02 AM
The thread: THE KISS
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 31, 2011, 10:22:02 AM
Explains why I didn't see it.
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Post by: tridecagirl on January 31, 2011, 10:22:21 AM
Yeppers.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on January 31, 2011, 10:22:54 AM
If you wanted me to read it, you shouldn't have called it "The kiss".
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Post by: tridecagirl on January 31, 2011, 10:23:11 AM
Sorry.   :-[
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Post by: Pavlova on January 31, 2011, 06:31:00 PM
That was good some people don't try and copy the writer's style so well done.
But sadly there is no competition for the real thing! :'(
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 02, 2011, 08:33:35 AM
Ok, so it's still in progress, but here it is....

Alek sat despondently in the bare seat next to Dylan's bed, or whatever his-or her- name was. He had been the only person to stay with his best friend all through the night in the sick bay. Dr. Barlow and Volger had occasionally popped in, but never for very long, and Nerkirk had work to do. For the umpteenth time, Alek scanned his friend's body, with the shirt open, exposing the revealing curves, whipped open for examining the small bullet wound in the stomach from the German attack, hoping that he had imagined the...curves that didn't belong on Dylan's body. But they were still there.
Suddenly Dylan's eyes fluttered. "Barking spiders! Its cold!" he or she shrieked, voice an octave higher than usual. Unfocused eyes hazily took in Alek, sitting stunned by the bed. "G'mornin'" came the slurred greeting. "Whatcha staring' at?"
Sighing, Alek said, "You." Finally noticing the open shirt, Dylan gasped. Scrambling franticly for something to cover up, she finally selected the thin sheets on the next bed over, and clutched them to her chest.
“It’s too late,” he said in a resigned tone. “Everyone has seen.”
Her eyes widened. “Everyone?” she looked down at her cursed chest. The unwanted proof.
“Why didn’t you tell me?” Alek said with barely suppressed tension.
“I tried, I really did, but the stupid Germans always barged in, or you said the wrong thing, and then Lilith-“
Alek cut her off. “Don’t bring Lilith into this,” he said abruptly.
“Right, so, don’t be mad at me! Please!” she was getting stressed now, that much was clear from her raising tones.
“Shhhhh! They might here.” Alek warned under his breath. “And…I’m not mad.”
“Thank you.”
An awkward silence followed.
“So……..” she was cut off by Alek pitching forward and kissing her on the cheek. He quickly scrambled out of the room, leaving a stunned girl sitting in silence, trying to comprehend what just happened. “Barking spiders,” she muttered.

Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: NetherBrood on February 02, 2011, 02:07:58 PM
Ok, so it's still in progress, but here it is....

Alek sat despondently in the bare seat next to Dylan's bed, or whatever his-or her- name was. He had been the only person to stay with his best friend all through the night in the sick bay. Dr. Barlow and Volger had occasionally popped in, but never for very long, and Nerkirk had work to do. For the umpteenth time, Alek scanned his friend's body, with the shirt open, exposing the revealing curves, whipped open for examining the small bullet wound in the stomach from the German attack, hoping that he had imagined the...curves that didn't belong on Dylan's body. But they were still there.
Suddenly Dylan's eyes fluttered. "Barking spiders! Its cold!" he or she shrieked, voice an octave higher than usual. Unfocused eyes hazily took in Alek, sitting stunned by the bed. "G'mornin'" came the slurred greeting. "Whatcha staring' at?"
Sighing, Alek said, "You." Finally noticing the open shirt, Dylan gasped. Scrambling franticly for something to cover up, she finally selected the thin sheets on the next bed over, and clutched them to her chest.
“It’s too late,” he said in a resigned tone. “Everyone has seen.”
Her eyes widened. “Everyone?” she looked down at her cursed chest. The unwanted proof.
“Why didn’t you tell me?” Alek said with barely suppressed tension.
“I tried, I really did, but the stupid Germans always barged in, or you said the wrong thing, and then Lilith-“
Alek cut her off. “Don’t bring Lilith into this,” he said abruptly.
“Right, so, don’t be mad at me! Please!” she was getting stressed now, that much was clear from her raising tones.
“Shhhhh! They might here.” Alek warned under his breath. “And…I’m not mad.”
“Thank you.”
An awkward silence followed.
“So……..” she was cut off by Alek pitching forward and kissing her on the cheek. He quickly scrambled out of the room, leaving a stunned girl sitting in silence, trying to comprehend what just happened. “Barking spiders,” she muttered.



Nicely done  :)
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Post by: MacK on February 02, 2011, 02:08:52 PM
you need to go to the fanfic topic and post it
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Post by: tridecagirl on February 02, 2011, 02:10:43 PM
I'll post it.
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Post by: waxesnostalgic on February 02, 2011, 02:11:49 PM
It's cute, though I don't know if they would have just left a girl's shirt open even if she was injured. Alek's "I'm not mad" was sweet.  ;D
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 02, 2011, 02:22:45 PM
Thanks!
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Post by: Pavlova on February 02, 2011, 03:11:02 PM
So he was checking her out...? It was good though!
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Post by: Seven on February 02, 2011, 03:26:23 PM
So he was checking her out...? It was good though!

My thoughts exactly. His eyes seemed to have lingered.
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Post by: Pavlova on February 02, 2011, 03:28:32 PM
Hehe, I have always wondered if he felt... attracted to Deryn even though he thought she was a boy... He did say that she was handsom ;D LOL
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Post by: Vadmaus on February 02, 2011, 08:52:32 PM
I still say my friend Codie can be handsome, if he tried. But I still have a girlfriend. A boy saying a boy is handsome isn't a big deal.
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Post by: MacK on February 03, 2011, 02:39:15 AM
did Pavlova delete her acount?
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Post by: Bea-la on February 03, 2011, 02:51:58 AM
Yup.
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 03, 2011, 04:28:15 AM
I don't know how appreciative I'd be if someone was staring at me while I was unconcious... :)
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Post by: holywalrus2 on February 03, 2011, 04:29:01 AM
 :D
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 03, 2011, 07:04:27 AM
That really didn't pop into my mind when i was writing it...
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Post by: tridecagirl on February 03, 2011, 11:44:18 AM
So he was checking her out...? It was good though!
I don't think Deryn would mind.  ;)
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Post by: NetherBrood on February 03, 2011, 01:21:25 PM
So he was checking her out...? It was good though!
I don't think Deryn would mind.  ;)

i din't think she would mind mutch either.
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 03, 2011, 04:50:59 PM
I still say my friend Codie can be handsome, if he tried. But I still have a girlfriend. A boy saying a boy is handsome isn't a big deal.
Have always wondered if guys say that, I always say my bf is cute, she is!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 04, 2011, 05:56:07 AM
yeah, that kind of stuff is normal
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Post by: Seven on February 04, 2011, 09:03:32 AM
I have heard guys say that other guys are "nice looking."
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Post by: tridecagirl on February 04, 2011, 09:04:06 AM
I tell girls they're pretty all the time.
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Post by: MacK on February 04, 2011, 09:06:06 AM
we should have a best fanfic competition. everyone writes one fanfic about 'THE KISS' and then a poll is made for who's the best was
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Post by: tridecagirl on February 04, 2011, 09:06:34 AM
Mmph... fanfic shouldn't be a competition.
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Post by: MacK on February 04, 2011, 09:08:36 AM
trut but it would be entertaining
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 04, 2011, 09:36:16 AM
That really didn't pop into my mind when i was writing it...

I was just kidding, that part really made it what it was. It showed how conflicted Alek was about the whole thing, and set it up the fact that Alek would be there when Deryn woke up. I think this was one of the best I've read actually. :)
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 04, 2011, 03:22:42 PM
a competition would be funny! i'd vote heaps!
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Post by: Starlight on February 04, 2011, 04:31:46 PM
You could have a competition for the funniest fanfic!
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 04, 2011, 05:18:25 PM
Now that would be awesome!!!!!!!!
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Post by: Starlight on February 05, 2011, 12:37:28 AM
It would be very entertaining. Lol
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 05, 2011, 07:40:44 AM
You could have a competition for the funniest fanfic!
Well I have started on so everyone get your stories in!
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 05, 2011, 11:00:06 PM
Funny Fan fic? sounds entertaining! ;D :D
(I'm awful at it though so I probably won't enter anything
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 06, 2011, 12:14:22 AM
but since this is just the fanfic, and there already is a fanfic, might as well..
this is not going to be funny!! and i already posted it under how I think Alek will find out Deryn's secret..
____
Melinda smiled nastily.
"Isn't this sad.  The one person who actually loved you, you sent away and broke her heart, not knowing what she even was." said Melinda
Alek was really confused.
"What are you talking about?" said Alek.
"Oh, isn't it obvious?  I would have thought you would have figured it out by now.  Shows what princes are like..."
"I never knew another girl except Lilit!!! And she loved Dylan!!!"
"Should i break the truth now..?" mused Melinda. "Or should i let her tell you..."
(so like alek was totally in love with Melinda, but then she betrayed him, and he broke deryn's heart)

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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 06, 2011, 12:17:39 AM
ok back to deryn.....

Alek was being held in one of the hotels rooms, probably the suite or something.
But he told you he hated you.  Deryn thought.  He said you're overreacting.  You're just jealous.
But she had to save him.  Even if she would never admit it, she was in love with the barking prince.
She slid around the corner of the wall, peeking at the guards.  There was three of them.  She might be able to do this.  Just be very, very careful.
___
"Anyway, lets forget about your admirer for awhile.  I have you in my custody.  You are going to sign this, giving all of your power and riches and commands, etc, to me." said Melinda sweetly.
"I will never do that!  You betrayed me!!  Just kill me and get it over with!" said Alek bravely.
"Hmmm, a bit troublesome, aren't we.  Well, we'll have this settled soon enough."
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 06, 2011, 01:20:25 PM
enter, it doesn't have to be very funny, just a little bit!
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 06, 2011, 01:21:44 PM
ok I'll try to come up with something... ::)
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 06, 2011, 01:22:48 PM
do, i have read some of your other ones and they're long but good
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 06, 2011, 01:23:18 PM
yeah I have a problem with longness  :P
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Post by: Pavlova2 on February 06, 2011, 01:24:02 PM
LOL i have a problem with shortness
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 06, 2011, 01:24:31 PM
:) lol
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Post by: One Person on February 07, 2011, 11:27:04 AM
Better than my fan fiction...
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 07, 2011, 11:39:12 AM
whats your fan fic?
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 07, 2011, 03:08:52 PM
That really didn't pop into my mind when i was writing it...

I was just kidding, that part really made it what it was. It showed how conflicted Alek was about the whole thing, and set it up the fact that Alek would be there when Deryn woke up. I think this was one of the best I've read actually. :)
now that just made my day! thanks so much ;D
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Post by: One Person on February 07, 2011, 03:15:25 PM
whats your fan fic?
Go to Fanfiction.net, the title is the Clanker Mercenary. I should reboot the story someday.
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 08, 2011, 10:49:45 AM
you could copy and paste it onto here!!!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 08, 2011, 12:24:45 PM
yeah that would be great. i would love to read it
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 08, 2011, 01:02:24 PM
That really didn't pop into my mind when i was writing it...

I was just kidding, that part really made it what it was. It showed how conflicted Alek was about the whole thing, and set it up the fact that Alek would be there when Deryn woke up. I think this was one of the best I've read actually. :)
now that just made my day! thanks so much ;D

No problem, you're welcome. It really was great! :)
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 11, 2011, 09:12:37 AM
 :D
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 11, 2011, 11:41:50 AM
yeah! oh, and in case I'm not on on monday (though thats really unlikely) HAPPY VALENTINE"S DAY
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 08:53:44 AM
Happy Early Valentine's Day! <3
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 09:13:05 AM
Okay, so I made a new part of my fanfic, but it is like a new chapter or something and I'm starting a new plot line.

Here goes...

The loud hustle of New York City resonated throughout the Leviathan, making all the crew jumpy. Everyone except Deryn. She was in her element. She had always loved cities like New York; all the different lives clumped together, each separate and each together at the same time. The energy was exciting.
But there was one –major- damper to her mood. She was stuck in a cabin. The captain knew, the crew knew, Newkirk knew, Dr. Barlow knew, and of course, Alek knew. Her secret was out. She was a stupid girl. No one would ever look at her in the same way, the same respectful way, again. No more.
Alek had been busy in the engine room since that night. Sometimes she thought he was avoiding her on purpose. And the more she thought, the more it seemed to be true. In one night, their friendship had died. But maybe something else was born. Alek had kissed her… not on the lips, of course, but on the cheek, where it was nice and lasted forever. In fact, she still felt the tingles throb behind the skin. It felt delicious.
Snap out of it! She scolded herself. She wasn’t a little lassie twirling her skirts at a dance. Or maybe she was…
A loud knocking startled her out of her thoughts. Opening the door, she found Newkirk standing apologetically in front of her.
“Um, the captain says that, since we’re getting new passengers, you can, uh, come out of your quarters, I guess…” he finished lamely.
“We’re getting new passengers?” she inquired. Weren’t they already heavy enough from the Clanker engines?
“Oh, well, yes,” he still seemed to having trouble talking to her. “They made a rather, um, important request, and people are saying that they paid quite heavily, I guess.”
“Well isn’t that the problem?” she pressed. “Won’t we be too heavy?”
“Captain’s shoving out most of Dr. Barlow’s equipment, it seems; because she doesn’t really need it anymore since those eggs of hers hatched.” Newkirk said.
Sensing the approaching awkwardness, Deryn rapidly changed the subject. “So I can come out?”
“Well, yes,” he said. “You know, as long as you don’t cause trouble”
Deryn’s eyes narrowed. “Me, cause trouble?” she said through her teeth. “I think you’re forgetting who gets your stupid butt out of trouble every time.” And with that she slammed the door in his face.
She was halfway into her pants before she remembered that she wasn’t allowed to wear her uniform anymore. But she couldn’t seem to tear herself out of the familiar cloth.
Tentatively she walked down the platforms until she got to the loading dock at the bottom of the ship. It looked like the entire crew was there. Even the Clankers were out of the engines and had cleaned up. Deryn allowed herself a small smile at the sight of Alek, with the not-quite cleaned fingernails that still had oil under them. He was talking to Klopp, waving his hands animatedly. She sighed as she imagined his voice, only he was talking to her, telling her…certain things. She shook herself awake. 
The captain was welcoming two people on board. One was a hefty man wearing an expensive suit, and the other was a boy about her age. The boy was sturdily built and had cropped golden hair and clear blue eyes that took the ship in with a precise air that Deryn immediately linked to intelligence. She had seen Dr. Barlow do the same thing when she first boarded. This new boy was a smart one. By the way that the captain was graciously welcoming them, it looked like they were important. Or just filthy rich. Maybe both.
The boy’s eyes scanned the crew, picking out different faces, just looking. But he stopped when he found Alek. He stared. The way he looked at Alek drove shivers up Deryn’s spine. It was almost like he wanted the prince. Like he was hungry. It was the look of the hunter.

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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 12, 2011, 11:49:12 AM
WRITE MORE PLEASE!!!!!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 01:11:54 PM
so this is the next part of my story, but it's not finished. i'll keep posting the new stuff on here

After the new passengers were settled, Alek went with the rest of his crew to the engines. But he couldn’t concentrate. His lips were burning. Dylan- or Deryn he heard her name was- was a girl. And he had kissed her. He had kissed Deryn; and it felt good. The shock of it still hadn’t faded. Alek doubted that it would ever go away. No, he couldn’t concentrate now.
Klopp and the crew noticed how distracted their charge was, but didn’t probe. Alek hadn’t told anyone, especially not Volger. The man had already been through this with Alek’s father and certainly wouldn’t approve. Anyways, this was his and Deryn’s, not anybody else’s.
He was fumbling the engine, he knew that. If he kept up like this, the ship would be in danger, so he handed the controls to Baurer and exited the room. He stumbled along the hall, finding his feet carrying him to his cabin without direction. He didn’t have a problem with that, so he went back to his thoughts. With his head in the clouds, Alek ran straight into that young man with the blonde hair that came aboard today.
“Oh!” Alek gasped. “Sorry!”
“That’s fine,” said the boy. “Happens to the best of us.”
 Alek nodded, edging past this stranger who was blocking his room.
“My name is Isaac,” the boy said.
Alek didn’t really care what his name was. Putting on a fake smile, he said, “Nice to meet you, Isaac.”
“And your name is…” Isaac wouldn’t stop probing.
“Alek.”
“Right, I read about you in the papers.”
So Isaac could read. No ordinary person these days read the paper. Chances were that Isaac was some kind of aristocrat. If so, then that explained why the captain was so gracious.
“Well, I would love to talk,” Alek continued to edge toward his door. “But I really got to go…” and with that he made for his door, leaving a frowning Isaac to curse under his breath.




Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 12, 2011, 01:27:20 PM
this is awesome!!  writemorewritemore
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 01:32:59 PM
thanks!
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 12, 2011, 01:34:04 PM
welcome now WRITE MORE
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 01:37:17 PM
whoa there, i'm still writing! you know i just finished that one today?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 12, 2011, 01:40:22 PM
ouch its called typing faster??!! but do get some sleep
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 12, 2011, 01:46:34 PM
thank you for understanding. i have to get up insanely early tomorrow, even though it's a Saturday! :'( >:(
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 13, 2011, 12:42:19 AM
sad!! why?  My brain wakes me up anyway at like 6  :P
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 13, 2011, 09:08:31 AM
a speech  contest :(
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 13, 2011, 09:37:31 AM
Good luck!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 13, 2011, 09:43:53 AM
thnx!
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 13, 2011, 02:28:22 PM
No problem! How'd you do?
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Post by: myst47 on February 13, 2011, 04:52:44 PM
GOOD JOB!!! I liked it!!!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 14, 2011, 04:16:00 AM
 :'(
No problem! How'd you do?
suckish. i got nervous
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Post by: NetherBrood on February 14, 2011, 04:37:15 AM
sad!! why?  My brain wakes me up anyway at like 6  :P

ya, i understand, my brain is hard wired to wake me up at 6:30 everyday whether or not i have to go to school.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 14, 2011, 04:38:08 AM
sad!! why?  My brain wakes me up anyway at like 6  :P

ya, i understand, my brain is hard wired to wake me up at 6:30 everyday whether or not i have to go to school.
Now that is sad! i love sleeping late!
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Post by: NetherBrood on February 14, 2011, 04:42:25 AM
sad!! why?  My brain wakes me up anyway at like 6  :P

ya, i understand, my brain is hard wired to wake me up at 6:30 everyday whether or not i have to go to school.
Now that is sad! i love sleeping late!

Its not all that bad, the half hour before my bus gets to the bus stop is well needed, and i don't sleep in so all i have to do is find something to do on the mornings durring the weekend.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 14, 2011, 04:44:04 AM
good for you. i sleep like a dead log
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Post by: hoverponies forever on February 14, 2011, 10:51:13 AM
Me too, but I always wake up early. ALWAYS. Drives me crazy.
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 14, 2011, 11:36:34 AM
:'(
No problem! How'd you do?
suckish. i got nervous

Aw! That's too bad.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 15, 2011, 08:45:28 AM
Me too, but I always wake up early. ALWAYS. Drives me crazy.
you have my pity
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 15, 2011, 09:21:57 AM
kk, so this part is mostly just thinking on Alek's part. still, i'm planning something big next... :D

Alek collapsed on his bed. Deryn still occupied every corner of his mind. He wasn’t really thinking of anything in particular, just everything about her; the glint in her eyes as she told her joke, the way she wasn’t scared of anything, things that he had noticed even when he didn’t know the secret, but he didn’t know what to do about them. He still didn’t know what to do about them.
Alek didn’t know if he should approach Deryn again. It would be decidedly awkward, but maybe worth it. Maybe he would get some answers, but maybe Deryn didn’t want to be kissed? What if he had crossed some invisible line and now she was mad at him?
But he missed Deryn. He wanted to talk with her.
No you don’t, you dummkolf! She is common. Will you make your children go through what your parents forced on you? I think not. But he had never seen it like this before. Now he was just confused; majorly, majorly, confused
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Post by: Vanilla Ice cream on February 15, 2011, 12:38:44 PM
I like the emotions. very good fan fic  :D
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Post by: hoverponies forever on February 15, 2011, 12:40:10 PM
ja.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 17, 2011, 08:48:46 AM
thnx!
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 17, 2011, 01:43:15 PM
Is there any more to the story?
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 18, 2011, 10:10:10 AM
definitely.. . i just dont know how it should start... :-\
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: NetherBrood on February 18, 2011, 10:11:46 AM
definitely.. . i just dont know how it should start... :-\

Yea i know what you mean its the same way with writing a book
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 18, 2011, 10:13:26 AM
thnx for the sympathy :)
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 18, 2011, 11:49:07 AM
You'll figure it out! Good writers do! ;)
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 20, 2011, 02:04:04 PM
now i feel all warm and happy inside! :D
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Post by: leviathanseries on February 21, 2011, 01:09:15 AM
Good! :D
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 21, 2011, 10:07:31 AM
hmmmmm......what if....... LIGHT BULB!!!!!!!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on February 21, 2011, 11:44:40 AM
Is that like a ding moment?
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 21, 2011, 11:45:37 AM
yep, i writing it right now!
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Post by: hoverponies forever on February 21, 2011, 11:46:53 AM
I get ding moments in the randomest places, and I always feel the urge to stand up and yell, "DING!" But then my science teacher would get mad, so there you go.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 21, 2011, 11:52:11 AM
my science teacher is really laid-back and cool :)
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on February 21, 2011, 11:53:59 AM
Mine is just boring. Plain old boring. And he would be annoyed if I stood up in the middle of class and yelled "DING!"
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 21, 2011, 11:59:08 AM
i can see why ;D
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Post by: hoverponies forever on February 21, 2011, 12:09:30 PM
Seriously. Who knew that earthquakes could be so inspiring?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 21, 2011, 12:12:19 PM
XD
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on February 21, 2011, 12:17:43 PM
ikr?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 26, 2011, 09:06:07 AM
we sat through an 'inspiring' special about natural disasters while the teacher graded our reproductive organs quizes. i'm not sure if i see a connection or not.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: myst47 on February 27, 2011, 09:06:08 PM
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 28, 2011, 07:25:31 AM
2 Weeks Later

Alek was going to talk to Deryn tonight; no matter what. He was not going to chicken out. He was not. But what should he talk about first? Their friendship? That night on the spine, the night everything changed? Each was potentially awkward…but then again, in this conversation, wouldn’t everything be awkward?
The more Alek thought, the more nervous he got, until it threatened to overflow. Leaping off the bed, Alek burst out of the confines of his suddenly stuffy room. He was going to talk to Deryn now, with no more time to think. Sometimes he thought too much. Alek was going to find Deryn now.
So where would she be? The best bet was the spine. They still had to patch up little leaks after the attack, so there was plenty of work to do. He scrambled to the skin of the beastie. It certainly was busy. But it wasn’t hard to find Deryn. The rest of the crew was giving her a wide berth, almost as if they were afraid that just working along side the liar would infect their reputations.
“Deryn!” Alek called. Glancing up, the girl visibly relaxed at the sight of Alek. She made her way toward him, and the crew parted through her as though she had the plague.
“Hey,” she breathed.
Here was where Alek’s tongue decided to stumble. “Well, I was-uh- wondering if we could um, talk?”
She looked a little apprehensive about his stuttering. “Sure.”
They went back to his cabin.
It was a little awkward as they sat down on the rather hard bed.
“So……” Deryn tried to ease the silence. But Alek wasn’t listening. They were so close, practically touching, and her smell got caught in his nose. He couldn’t help himself; he leaned forward, just slightly, but enough to be noticed, and Deryn did notice. “No,” she said in a choked voice, and darted out of the room.
So she didn’t want to be kissed the first time. She was mad at him, all because she was a barking girl. It hadn’t been like this when she was a boy, so why had it all of a sudden changed as soon as the secret was out?
Getting up from the bed, he stubbed his toe. He jumped around the room, cursing extravagantly, so he didn’t hear the throbbing alarm sounding, calling for all arms to port. Grumbling under his breath, Alek climbed to the spine. He needed out of this cramped room. He needed to clear his thoughts.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on February 28, 2011, 10:19:04 AM
Ah! It was all a dream? Thank goodness, but we need to know what'll happen with Alek and Deryn!

Write more please? :)
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 28, 2011, 10:46:58 AM
sadly, not a dream.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on February 28, 2011, 11:12:46 AM
Oh! I thought since the alarm was going off and he jumped out of bed...
Clearly, I misread.
Nevertheless, more needs to be written! ;)
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Atom277 on February 28, 2011, 11:15:17 AM
Oh! I thought since the alarm was going off and he jumped out of bed...
Clearly, I misread.
Nevertheless, more needs to be written! ;)

Ya hurry write more
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on February 28, 2011, 11:32:21 AM
on the way...
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on March 01, 2011, 12:20:47 PM
Great! Waiting patiently by...
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 02, 2011, 11:33:36 AM
hurry it up!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 02, 2011, 12:34:10 PM
wait for it......
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on March 02, 2011, 12:34:52 PM
Waiting...
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 02, 2011, 12:36:50 PM
i'm in the middle of an epic part!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 02, 2011, 12:57:54 PM
epic parts are good...
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ItalianRose5 on March 03, 2011, 05:48:21 AM
you know what's epic?  Volger's stache!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on March 03, 2011, 07:07:24 AM
you know what's epic?  Volger's stache!

True, so very true.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 08:41:10 AM
should i poison alek?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on March 03, 2011, 09:39:37 AM
Like father like son.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on March 03, 2011, 09:44:46 AM
should i poison alek?

No, I don't think so. I want him to live and I'm kinda craving a happy ending. Maybe not a life-threatening poison...
But you're the author. :)
And I know certain other people on here/ reading this post may think otherwise.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 09:46:01 AM
hmmmmm....
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 10:25:56 AM
POISON HIM! POISON HIM! YES YES YES!!!!!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on March 03, 2011, 10:26:53 AM
I knew that was coming. ^
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 10:27:21 AM
I don't know how you knew.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 01:04:23 PM
COMPERMISE! Poisnon him, but have him wake up  buryed! Or at his wake.  (Thoughs ideas... where on earth did they come from.... You know, just ignore me.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 01:07:59 PM
Or you could just kill him. That works too.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 01:08:59 PM
I like the thinking he is dead, but he is just in a coma idea better.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 01:10:14 PM
dead. 100% dead. KIll him.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 01:14:05 PM
NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Actually, it wouldn't be too bad...

Why don't you wright both endings?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 01:14:46 PM
Or you could just off him.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 01:16:07 PM
OR he could live.
Do we need an Alek Protection Service?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on March 03, 2011, 01:19:29 PM
Only if he dies heroically, such as the classic heroic sacrifice. With honor, and all that jazz.

And I would join the Alek Protection Service. There is one for Deryn, so why not?

Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 01:20:50 PM
Should I make the APS Thread? DO we need one?

If Alek dies, Deryn should too.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: tridecagirl on March 03, 2011, 01:21:50 PM
HPF, you made my day.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 01:26:56 PM
nice to know.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 01:53:26 PM
i am carefully considering all the options....and......
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 01:54:52 PM
you're gonna kill him?!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ItalianRose5 on March 03, 2011, 02:04:14 PM
oh don't kill Alek!  Although I like the poison enough to make him sick and almost die, but then doesn't.  And maybe Deryn find the cure. 
Corny yes, but please don't off Alek.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 02:06:02 PM
Off Alek! Please off Alek! I don't like him! Can you kill Deryn while you're at it?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 02:11:49 PM
you want me to kill both of the mains? then who will I write about?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 02:12:11 PM
Bovril, Newkirk, Volger, and Dr. Barlow!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: tridecagirl on March 03, 2011, 02:12:56 PM
oh don't kill Alek!  Although I like the poison enough to make him sick and almost die, but then doesn't.  And maybe Deryn find the cure. 
Corny yes, but please don't off Alek.

I like this one. She can find some Japanese magic cure. :)
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ItalianRose5 on March 03, 2011, 02:14:16 PM
oh don't kill Alek!  Although I like the poison enough to make him sick and almost die, but then doesn't.  And maybe Deryn find the cure. 
Corny yes, but please don't off Alek.

I like this one. She can find some Japanese magic cure. :)

LoL.  Thank you!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on March 03, 2011, 02:14:56 PM
Bovril, Newkirk, Volger, and Dr. Barlow!

As much as I enjoy stories from minor characters...Alek's life is more important to me.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 02:21:57 PM
You guys are dummkopfs. Alek is an idiot.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 02:34:08 PM
i am not writing about Newkirk. Ugh.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 02:41:16 PM
What's wrong with newkirk?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 03, 2011, 02:52:52 PM
he's bland. and un-interesting.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 02:56:47 PM
NO he's not! He's funny and stupid and altogether awesome!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:11:08 PM
I like Newkirk! He's awesome. But I like Alek and Deryn, too. And Volger and Dr. Barlow.

Really, the only characters I do not like are the Captain and Eddy Malone. I hate the Captain, and I can't stand Eddy Malone.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 03:11:31 PM
I like Eddie Malone's frog.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 03:15:04 PM
He's not bland! I'm writing a whole 15- section fanfiction on his love life!(not with deryn.  She's wit Alek) It is interesting, because Robina, deryns cousin, pranks Alek, so then Deryn pranks Robina by convincin Newkirk that Robina likes him! And I'm nit even sure if Robina exiists, or if she is Deryn, indisguise(in a letter).  And Newkirk acts like a sweet, itiotic, lovesick fool too Robina, who is basicly Deryn's identical twin, only she is considering joining the navy, and Newkirk gets all sexist! And.... thats as far as I got.

You could write multiple endings, or write one, and then go bavk and write another!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:15:57 PM
Oh, his frog is awesome, no doubt about it. But Eddy can go. I don't want him to be snooping in on Deryn and Alek in Goliath.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 03:18:28 PM
Yay! lets kill Eddie!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: bunniesandcaffeine on March 03, 2011, 03:19:01 PM
Unfortunately, Eddie Malone is at least being mentioned in Goliath, and probably making an appearance. He's one of the two people who don't know Deryn's secret already who I think can figure it out (the other being Dr. Barlow, obviously) so he may have a seriously major role.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:19:54 PM
Yes!! And can we kill the Captain while we're at it too?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:20:43 PM
Oh, I know Eddie will be mentioned, but I won't like it....
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 03:21:20 PM
Yes!! And can we kill the Captain while we're at it too?
Oh, he's boring.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:22:38 PM
And he's a jerk >:(
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 03:24:18 PM
Rememeber we already giottened hobbes, rigby, and that other guy? Forgot which thread...
How could we have forgoten Eddie?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:26:27 PM
You guys offed Mr. Rigby?! Aw, why? He's not so bad....
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 03:32:00 PM
Um... he was a person of power who could kick a certain some one(or two) off the Leviathan, and I HAD JUST EATEN JELLY BEANS! Jelly beans=Lots of sugar+yummynes=very hyper me who makes very sugar high me.  Those are my reasons.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 03:32:45 PM
We offed Hobbes, Rigby, and HIrst.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:37:33 PM
I don't know how Rigby would feel about kicking Deryn off the ship. She's his best middie! Mmmm.... jelly beans! I like the starburst ones the most!

Wait, who's Hobbes again? My brain isn't picking him out.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 03:39:05 PM
The captain

PEAR JELLY BEANS RULE!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: hoverponies forever on March 03, 2011, 03:39:34 PM
I like the sour cherry ones...
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 03, 2011, 03:41:14 PM
Green apple and tangerine are the best!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: FleaBird6 on March 03, 2011, 04:21:07 PM
PEAR! Or any of the sweeter fruits.
Just not black licorice.

What was this discussion about, before Jelly Beans popped up?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ItalianRose5 on March 03, 2011, 11:20:12 PM
Unfortunately, Eddie Malone is at least being mentioned in Goliath, and probably making an appearance. He's one of the two people who don't know Deryn's secret already who I think can figure it out (the other being Dr. Barlow, obviously) so he may have a seriously major role.

I actually think Barlow knows already.  She's just making Deryn believe that it's about her age.  I actually think she's smarter than Volger, so if he knows, she most definitely knows.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Starlight on March 04, 2011, 12:38:16 AM
Unfortunately, Eddie Malone is at least being mentioned in Goliath, and probably making an appearance. He's one of the two people who don't know Deryn's secret already who I think can figure it out (the other being Dr. Barlow, obviously) so he may have a seriously major role.

I actually think Barlow knows already.  She's just making Deryn believe that it's about her age.  I actually think she's smarter than Volger, so if he knows, she most definitely knows.

Dr. Barlow definitely knows, and she is smarter than Volger. If she didn't find out in Leviathan, then she did in Behemoth. Don't underestimate her cleverness!
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: Seven on March 04, 2011, 03:50:57 AM
In my very humble opinion, I do not think she knows. There hasn't been any indication or clue that she does know. And if she did know, she would have understood the MR. Sharp thing at the end of the book. I feel if saying she knows is sort of jumping the gun. And what makes you think she is smarter than the count?
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: ItalianRose5 on March 04, 2011, 03:58:49 AM
In my very humble opinion, I do not think she knows. There hasn't been any indication or clue that she does know. And if she did know, she would have understood the MR. Sharp thing at the end of the book. I feel if saying she knows is sort of jumping the gun. And what makes you think she is smarter than the count?

Because she's Dr. flippin' Barlow!  LoL.  I don't know, I just have a feeling she knows. 
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: holywalrus2 on March 04, 2011, 05:30:20 AM
I think she doesn't totally know, but is thinking it's a real possibility. or she knows, and has a real sneaky plan to have something with deryn's secret.
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: PhoenixAshes on March 04, 2011, 05:58:04 AM
When I first read Leviathan, I thought Dr. Barlow knew Deryn's secret. But when I read Behemoth, I figured maybe she really didn't know. Of course, I think she might have a strong suspicion now.

I really thought she was going to discover Deryn's secret first, not Volger. But I think it was better for Volger to find out first. Besides, it was funny :D
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: holywalrus2 on March 04, 2011, 06:18:44 AM
Lolz :D
Title: Re: Fanfic
Post by: leviathanseries on March 04, 2011, 07:22:37 AM
In my very humble opinion, I do not think she knows. There hasn't been any indication or clue that she does know. And if she did know, she would have understood the MR. Sharp thing at the end of the book. I feel if saying she knows is sort of jumping the gun. And what makes you think she is smarter than the count?

I really hope she doesn't know. I like the idea that there's at least something out there she doesn't know. But that was a good point, if the count knows, shouldn't Dr. Barlow? She's known Deryn longer.
I think she didn't know in Leviathan, but if she did know, it was in Behemoth... at the end, with that Mr. Sharp thing and the "loris are only supposed to attatch to one person unless..." thing it could have made it fairly obvious for her.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 04, 2011, 09:46:14 AM
she was utterly confused at the end of Behemoth. She didn't know then, but she has a big suspicion now, or already knows.
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Post by: waxesnostalgic on March 04, 2011, 11:56:09 AM
When I first read Leviathan, I thought Dr. Barlow knew Deryn's secret. But when I read Behemoth, I figured maybe she really didn't know. Of course, I think she might have a strong suspicion now.

I really thought she was going to discover Deryn's secret first, not Volger. But I think it was better for Volger to find out first. Besides, it was funny :D

That's exactly what I thought... I would have bet money that she knew. Though now, I realize that what I interpreted as her knowing was just her bluffing sneakiness. We know her a lot better as a character now. I think that with her loris she will figure it out very early in Goliath.
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Post by: danni on March 04, 2011, 12:22:22 PM
He's not bland! I'm writing a whole 15- section fanfiction on his love life!(not with deryn.  She's wit Alek) It is interesting, because Robina, deryns cousin, pranks Alek, so then Deryn pranks Robina by convincin Newkirk that Robina likes him! And I'm nit even sure if Robina exiists, or if she is Deryn, indisguise(in a letter).  And Newkirk acts like a sweet, itiotic, lovesick fool too Robina, who is basicly Deryn's identical twin, only she is considering joining the navy, and Newkirk gets all sexist! And.... thats as far as I got.

You could write multiple endings, or write one, and then go bavk and write another!
woah woah woah!!! YOU'RE the person who's writing that fic? I'm still waiting for more parts!!!!!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 04, 2011, 12:37:09 PM
i'm currently addicted to like 15 different fanfics.

Alek POV

It was windy on the spine. The soft breeze felt good on his crawling skin though, and it sent goose bumps up his arms. Instead of answering the insistent piping of the alarm, he sat down on the edge of the membrane, staring out at the clear and endless sky, stained with blood-colored streaks of cloud as the sun died in the west. The red color reflected his mood very well. The water of the ocean underneath was inky black.
So it would never be anything with Deryn, because she had clearly rejected him. Even after all clues that she had sent him, the clues that he had apparently misinterpreted. 
There was a soft thud of footsteps behind him. Isaac the Blonde sat next to him on the rough skin of the beastie.
“What’s the matter?” inquired Isaac.
This is not the time to bud into my business, Alek thought. He didn’t want to talk to this stranger. But Isaac continued on, unaware.
“Maybe you could talk to me, I don’t know, sometime later in you cabin, so-“
But Alek wasn’t listening anymore. He was just tuning Isaac out; this boy was annoying. So he didn’t see it as Isaac reached inside his coat and pulled out a gun. The blonde boy continued to talk without thinking as he brought the metal butt of the pistol slamming against the back of Alek’s head. The prince felt an excruciating explosion on his neck and then everything went black.   
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Post by: FleaBird6 on March 04, 2011, 01:14:51 PM
EEKS!
DOes he die?
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Post by: bunniesandcaffeine on March 04, 2011, 01:16:49 PM
Unfortunately, Eddie Malone is at least being mentioned in Goliath, and probably making an appearance. He's one of the two people who don't know Deryn's secret already who I think can figure it out (the other being Dr. Barlow, obviously) so he may have a seriously major role.
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I actually think Barlow knows already.  She's just making Deryn believe that it's about her age.  I actually think she's smarter than Volger, so if he knows, she most definitely knows.

Yeah, I think she might know. I probably should have put "He's one of the two people who don't explicitly know Deryn's secret already" because if Dr. Barlow knows, neither Deryn nor Alek have figured out that she knows. In Alek's case, it would be that he realizes Dr. Barlow and Volger know the same secret about "Dylan" (At that point, he would probably demand to know the secret and he might be told (if he's told at that point, it would be by Volger). Hopefully, he won't figure out if Dr. Barlow knows.)
Now that I'm thinking about it, Dr. Barlow might know but won't mention anything about it since she is also a woman in a man's profession and knows Deryn's frustration. Dr. Barlow may feel a solidarity with Deryn if she knows or when she finds out.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 04, 2011, 01:17:43 PM
EEKS!
DOes he die?

*evil and controlling laugh* Mwahahahahhaha!


Isaac's POV

Isaac calmly bound Alek’s hand to a taunt rope on the skin of the godless creature; he didn’t want his prize to go rolling off the side. He looked over the unconscious body with a professional air. It was time; say bye-bye to the stubborn aristocrat in his way. From inside a cleverly hidden pocket in his posh jacket, he pulled a small syringe, filled to the brim with clear liquid. Onto part two of the plan.
Isaac hesitated, holding the needle over several parts of Alek. Where was that bloodstream junction again? Wasn’t it in the wrist, or something? Well, who cared? The poison would get to every system, no matter what. Without further ado, Isaac plunged the syringe into Alek’s neck, careful of the windpipe. The affects would start to show up in a few minutes, and by then the prince could be awake. It was time to scram. Isaac cast one last smirk in the direction of his victim before descending into the godless beast to his cabin.

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Post by: hoverponies forever on March 04, 2011, 01:33:00 PM
YES! Yes! yes! HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH YAY!!!!!!! BTW, who is Isaac?
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 04, 2011, 01:36:09 PM
have you read earlier ones? he is a new passenger on the Levi who Alek finds annoying, and Deryn made a generalization that he is cunning. When he came aboard, he stared at Alek rather ominously.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on March 04, 2011, 02:07:39 PM
yeah, I read a bunch of earlier ones, must have missed a few.
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 04, 2011, 02:14:21 PM
well, Isaac is the antagonist in my fanfic.
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Post by: hoverponies forever on March 04, 2011, 02:49:06 PM
*shrugs* cool. If he's against Alek, then it's all good.
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Post by: CorpseVendor on March 04, 2011, 02:53:48 PM
Isaac Clarke? Kickass.... X3

lolz Jk
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Post by: leviathanseries on March 05, 2011, 08:33:47 AM
When I first read Leviathan, I thought Dr. Barlow knew Deryn's secret. But when I read Behemoth, I figured maybe she really didn't know. Of course, I think she might have a strong suspicion now.

I really thought she was going to discover Deryn's secret first, not Volger. But I think it was better for Volger to find out first. Besides, it was funny :D

That's exactly what I thought... I would have bet money that she knew. Though now, I realize that what I interpreted as her knowing was just her bluffing sneakiness. We know her a lot better as a character now. I think that with her loris she will figure it out very early in Goliath.

I also think she'll figure it out in Goliath, (if she hasn't already), then wait for Deryn to tell her herself. But perhaps she's known Dylan was a Deryn all along, and that's why she's taken such the strong liking to her. And as mentioned earlier by bunniesandcaffeine if she knows she's a girl, she might want to keep this secret out of admiration or personal preference.
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Post by: leviathanseries on March 05, 2011, 08:35:06 AM
Also, this new part of the story is extremely awesome! Lethal injections? Kind of creepy but hey! It's original on here, and cool! :)
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 16, 2011, 12:16:15 PM
Pain. A dull, thudding throb from the back of his head, and a much sharper prick from his neck. Alek forced his heavy eyelids open. The world wouldn’t shape itself properly, and major sections seemed blurry. His limbs seemed glued down to. Nothing would move. What happened? He was on the ground; that much was sure. Could he have slipped?
Alek lurched to his feet, none to graceful. His legs still wouldn’t work right. He decided that he should probably lie down for awhile; his head was feeling decisively odd. He stumbled to the ladder leading into the beast.
Suddenly a dizzying wave crashed over him; the surface under his feet lurched, and the floor came rushing up to meet him. His head felt like a beast was clawing at it, trying to get in. He curled into a fetal position, trying to protect his head form this animal attacking. Alek could even see the monster; it was standing in front of him, making loud whistling sounds and shouting insistently. That was all his eyes registered as the monster swallowed him whole.

sorry if you're confused, but one of the symptoms is hallucination and this is from Alek's POV. there really isn't a monster there, actually, it's Deryn
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Post by: hoverponies forever on March 16, 2011, 12:21:13 PM
he's gonna die! He's gonna die!


... he is gonna die, right?
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 16, 2011, 12:22:17 PM
he might, or he might have something worse coming for him. this is just the tip of the iceberg!
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Post by: hoverponies forever on March 16, 2011, 12:22:57 PM
yay! Problems for Alek!
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Post by: ArtfullyInsane on March 16, 2011, 12:23:36 PM
and therefor problems for Deryn ;)