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Black_Rose

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Unnamed...
« on: December 05, 2015, 09:53:03 AM »

So um...
I'm writing a book. Its a bit different from the norm, but I'm still experimenting with techniques and things.
BUT anyways! I would love some feedback any ideas or thoughts, ways to improve it, I promise(if i have time and im not being lazy or anything like that) I will read all the comments :)


https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/56023877-unnamed
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Re: Unnamed...
« Reply #1 on: December 05, 2015, 10:09:44 AM »

Well I just uninstalled the Wattpad app yesterday and it looks like now I will download it again :P
I really like it so far! The only real criticism I have is that you kept switching between past and present tense, which was pretty confusing.
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Re: Unnamed...
« Reply #2 on: December 05, 2015, 10:13:28 AM »

I have a tendancy of doing that.. i really need an editor that i can trust. :P

In the very first draft of this book nearly a year ago like.. halfway through it daniel got switched to david. I don't know what is wrong with my brain XD
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Re: Unnamed...
« Reply #3 on: December 05, 2015, 11:29:14 AM »

I have done things like that. Many times e-e
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Re: Unnamed...
« Reply #4 on: December 05, 2015, 12:47:35 PM »

noice
poet, author, fangirl...
is there anything you aren't?
I offer my congratulations, that was surprisingly well written. (apart from the few errors here and there)
That seems like that story is going to go places
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Re: Unnamed...
« Reply #5 on: December 05, 2015, 12:58:42 PM »

Not really. i try to do everything. a Jane of all trades of you will :)

Thanks :) i'm really good at detail work. its the rest of the story a lagitamate plot with no hole that i have trouble with XD lol
This book is my challenge to myself this year. I've given myself the rest of the school year to write 50 pages and at least 5 chapters. I attempted to extend this challenge to my friends but they didnt exactly stay on board :P
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