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While we're waiting for Goliath...
« on: February 06, 2011, 09:49:59 AM »

So, I've been thinking... and since Goliath's release date is so far away, we need something to keep us busy.   So you can post fan art, fan fiction and stuff here.  No making fu of other people's stuff, but constructed critcism is alright.  have fun!
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #1 on: February 06, 2011, 09:52:57 AM »

Ok so here is fanfiction i made..... Um, it starts in the middle, where Alek has been falling in love with a girl who is here visiting the Leviathan to study Dr. Barlow, and Deryn has gone crazy with jeaslousy, and then the girl turned out to be a trailtor, and is crazy. and alek blew up at deryn, thinking she was jealous that the girl loved Alek instea of Dylan.
___Melinda smiled nastily.
"Isn't this sad.  The one person who actually loved you, you sent away and broke her heart, not knowing what she even was." said Melinda
Alek was really confused.
"What are you talking about?" said Alek.
"Oh, isn't it obvious?  I would have thought you would have figured it out by now.  Shows what princes are like..."
"I never knew another girl except Lilit!!! And she loved Dylan!!!"
"Should i break the truth now..?" mused Melinda. "Or should i let her tell you..."

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ok back to deryn.....

Alek was being held in one of the hotels rooms, probably the suite or something.
But he told you he hated you.  Deryn thought.  He said you're overreacting.  You're just jealous.
But she had to save him.  Even if she would never admit it, she was in love with the barking prince.
She slid around the corner of the wall, peeking at the guards.  There was three of them.  She might be able to do this.  Just be very, very careful.
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"Anyway, lets forget about your admirer for awhile.  I have you in my custody.  You are going to sign this, giving all of your power and riches and commands, etc, to me." said Melinda sweetly.
"I will never do that!  You betrayed me!!  Just kill me and get it over with!" said Alek bravely.
"Hmmm, a bit troublesome, aren't we.  Well, we'll have this settled soon enough."
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Deryn took out the pistol she had stolen from the clanker armory.
She didn't want to shoot anybody, so she took careful aim and shot a couple of crates about twenty feet away from the doors.
They banged and rattle, the jars inside of them shaking.  The three guards ran towards them.
She took off, running fast and silently toward the doors.  Ten feet, seven feet.
A shout.  She had been seen.
She kept running though.  She was about through the great glass doors when a lout crack filled the air.  One of the doors shattered.  She shielded herself from the glass, and then a pain shot through her body, coming from her side.
She had been shot.
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Alek heard a loud crack coming from where the reception area was.
Melinda look up from the desk she was writing on and frowned.  
"We must have visitors."
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #2 on: February 06, 2011, 09:56:08 AM »

It hurt.  It really hurt.  She kept trying to run, pressing her hand to try and staunch the bloodflow.
Everything was fading.  She had to try, find her prince..
Then Deryn fell, and everything went black.
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A few minutes later, a guard came to the suite.
"There's been a disturbance.  Somebody, a boy, tried to come in.  He's been shot, but he's still alive."
"Bring him here." said Melinda.
Alek felt fear.  The rescuer had been shot.  It couldn't be...
The guard came back carrying a small blond form with blood dripping from his side.
It was Dylan.What have you done!!?" yelled Alek, his voice breaking.
"Oh, and here"s our hero now, the infamous Dylan Sharp.  Only now, He's been shot." Melinda said, emphasizing the word he.
"Please.  Don't hurt Dylan. " begged Alek.
Dylan stirred, groaning.
"Alek...." he murmured.
"Dylan?  Are you all right? Please live. You can't die.  i'm sorry for what I said. You were right." Alek said.
Melinda smiled.
"Well, I'm sure your apology will be accepted.  If Dylan lives."
Alek didn't reply.
"Now, I'm thinking that if it were Dylan here who's life was in the balance, we might be a little more willing to sign something....."
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #3 on: February 06, 2011, 09:58:35 AM »

Alek hung his head.  He had lost.  Everything was in ruins.
"Fine."
Deryn moaned again.
"Da, no! please don't! Don't leave me!!!" said Dylan.
It must be a nightmare, thought Alek.
There were tears running down Dylan's face now.
"You have no idea what its like without you!!! There's a boy, and.."
Melinda smiled.
"Dylans talking about you, Alek..."
"I hate being what I am!! I wish... I wish it weren't so hard!!!And now you have to go!!" Dylan was sobbing.
"Dylan, its just a nightmare. Wake up, please!!" Alek begged.
Dylan woke up.
He opened up his eyes, and then gasped and held his side.
"Dylan, are you okay?" asked Alek desperately.
ok deryn's point of veiw now..
Alek was tied to a chair, and Melinda was at a desk in the corner of the room.
Oh no.  melinda.
"Alek?" she asked.
"What? Oh, Dylan, I'm so sorry.  I don't know why I said those things, and now you're shot, and its all my fault..." Alek was crying now, and he looked broken.
"Its alright.  Just, whatever Melinda says, know that I'm sorry too.  And its not all your fault.  You've had to deal with being a prince, and all that other stuff, and I know it must be hard."
Melinda was watching this exchange with bemused silence.
"Whatever i say?  I haven't told him yet, Dylan.  you're in luck."
Melinda smiled, drawing out their attention.
Deryn was scared.  Melinda was going to tell Alek who she was.  In the worst situation possible.
Alek was wondering what Melinda was talking about.
"Ok, I am going to make this painful for you Dylan, since i've already harmed Alek.   Alek, Dylan.....is........a..........."
"No!!!" yelled Deryn. "Please!!! Don't tell him!!!! NOt Here!!!"
"too bad.  Alek, Dylan is a girl."
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #4 on: February 06, 2011, 10:00:26 AM »

It took Alek a few seconds to process this.
"Wa-What?" he managed to get out.
Then it hit him.
Smart, brave, always there Dylan was a girl.
"Alek, you have to understand. I just couldn't tell you.  Because if i did tell you, I'd be nothing to you.  Just a stupid, common as dirt little girl in a big airship."  Dylan sounded bitter, and there were tears running down her face."But you've saved my life! And, you're brave, and smart, and daring and...."  Alek broke off.
This explained why Dylan looked so... pretty ...sometimes.
Melinda spoke.
"its been so funny, the past few weeks, with you breaking poor Dylan's heart and not even realizing it, because you're always trying to impress me."
Just then, a guard came into the room again.
"Miss, we need you in the lobby. Some... visitors."
"ok Mert, I'll be rigth down."  "and you two, stay put."
She left, and then Deryn stood up, stumbling a bit.
"you've..been in love with me?" Alek asked.
Dylan stopped in front of him and, taking out a knife, cut his ropes.
Alek stood up.
Deryn was very close to him now.  Her eyes were entrancing.
"First of all, my name's not Dylan.  Its Deryn."
"And second of all...."

Deryn leaned close and then softly kissed him.
Alek stared in shock at Deryn.
Then she fell.
Alek had nearly forgotten about her being shot.
Blood was soaking her clothes.
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #5 on: February 06, 2011, 10:22:36 AM »

Awesomenessss
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #6 on: February 06, 2011, 10:43:50 AM »

thanks :)  the rest is under How I think Alek will find out about Deryn.
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #7 on: February 06, 2011, 10:44:21 AM »

I'm working on an Uglies fan fic!
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #8 on: February 06, 2011, 10:45:07 AM »

cool!! whats it called?
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #9 on: February 06, 2011, 10:46:32 AM »

David's Eyebrow Scar, it's about how David get the scar on his face.  With luck I should post it in the Uglies board some time tonight.
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #10 on: February 06, 2011, 10:51:18 AM »

Ok this is going to be another Fan Fic.
It takes place seven years after my first fanfic.  
Jaspert opened the door and grinned.
"Deryn!!! Welcome home!!!"
"Glad to be here," Deryn said, and smiled back.  It had been three years since she had last visited home, on her nineteenth birthday.  She had missed Jaspert.
"Oh, and you remember Alek," said Deryn, introducing Alek, who was standing right behind her.
"Hi Alek!  Still sticking around with Deryn, I see." said Jaspert.
Alek laughed.  "Yes, I'm still with her."

Sequel to Nilla's first Fanfic :D
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #11 on: February 06, 2011, 10:56:02 AM »

Go On...  :)
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #12 on: February 06, 2011, 11:24:27 AM »

"Can we come inside?" Deryn asked, interrupting the conversation.
"I suppose" said Jasperts with a dramatic sigh, and let them in.
Deryn set down her bag and looked around.  The house had changed a bit, but still seemed the same.
"Wow, you have a nice house" said Alek, who had never been there before.
Deryn rolled her eyes.  Alek was a prince, and so his house probably had been a lot nicer than this.
"I'm going to go put my stuff away.  Alek, you can have the spare bedroom."  Alek followed deryn down a smll hallway, and into her old bedroom.  It had a bed, a mirror and a dresser, and a large window overlooking the street.
"Your old bedroom is nice.  Its.. cozy" remarked Alek.
"I've missed this place.  Its been over three years..."
Alek smiled and pulled her close, kissing her forehead.
"Its going to be a fun day tomorrow.  I get to meet your mother again, and talk to your brother, and we'll have lots of time together."
"Like we always do" reminded Deryn.  "Now come on, I've got to show you to your room."
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #13 on: February 06, 2011, 12:13:39 PM »

Ok another random Fan Fic that clouded my mind.....
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Deryn stared after Alek, half smiling and thinking of his eyes.  Then she shook herself.
"Deryn Sharp, get a grip"  she said outloud.
Un noticed, Bovril, riding on her shoulder, cocked his head and thought about the words.
 When she met up with Alek again, she was careful not to do what she had done before.
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Re: While we're waiting for Goliath...
« Reply #14 on: February 06, 2011, 12:28:09 PM »

Sorry to interrupt but make sure you check out my fanfic : My First Fanfic! in the Uglies board.
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