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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #60 on: May 05, 2012, 09:09:51 AM »

Good stuff, isn't it? I actually started the fic. I'll send it to you when I have more stuff.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #61 on: May 05, 2012, 09:20:30 AM »

Sweet! I'm looking forward to it!
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #62 on: May 05, 2012, 09:32:58 AM »

I might as well send you what I have now. It's not much (did some Live while I was off) but It's a start.
Smoked Out

Shay thought it would be a standard tag-and-bag mission. The kind that normal Specials could have handled, not her and the rest of the Cutters. Just another small wanna-be Smoke out in the middle of no-where.
Then something white shot up from the dense trees her hovercar was flying over, and blew apart the one next to hers.
At first, she didn't think it was real; just an optical illusion.
Then the severed arm of one of the occupants slammed into her windshield.
She yelled (not screamed, she told herself, Specials don't scream) and shoved the controls to the right. The hovercar tilted, and barely avoided another white pillar of what Shay could now see was smoke.
She didn't have enough time to put cause and effect together before she was suddenly falling through the air in a cloud of debris.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #63 on: May 05, 2012, 09:42:49 AM »

Nice! When you have a little more, I'll help you with the revisions :D I'm picky and pretentious, which is why I'm sought out as an editor for every writing assignment we get. My friend owes me a half-hour where I get to whine about my story's plotlessness because I skipped lunch to edit his final essay and basically saved his butt by a letter grade.

As far as the story goes, the only things I'd change are a couple of word choices, some line breaks and a hyphen, which is basically nothing.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #64 on: May 05, 2012, 09:45:20 AM »

More can be done. And I'm glad I have someone like you who can actually pick out bad stuff. Everyone else is like "cool story bro". Blegh. Alright, back to work.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #65 on: May 05, 2012, 09:46:42 AM »

I'm super critical. Maybe I should be an editor.
Heh. That actually sounds like... a really good idea.
Would probably make more money than an anthropology professor...
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #66 on: May 05, 2012, 09:47:37 AM »

I could see you being one. It would certainly pay good. And yes, antorpology does not get much in the line of money nowadays.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #67 on: May 05, 2012, 09:55:02 AM »

Or anydays xD Although it is an excuse to be completely insane, which sounds like fun. Although I'm not a fan of forensics. Bones are cool, but the rest scares me.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #68 on: May 05, 2012, 10:00:39 AM »

That means you're sane. Anyone who fines real interest in anything except bones is either a doctor or needs to see one.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #69 on: May 05, 2012, 10:04:58 AM »

Well that's one way to explain it!
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #70 on: May 05, 2012, 10:06:53 AM »

I'm proud of my self for that one.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #71 on: May 05, 2012, 10:08:42 AM »

I would be too, actually xD Maybe I'll go into publishing instead... maybe that could be my excuse to drop that second AP history course next year... except I don't want to :P They only run AP euro once in a while, and it's looking good this year for enrollment.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #72 on: May 05, 2012, 10:21:04 AM »

Hey, if it's there, take it. That's my advice.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #73 on: May 05, 2012, 10:37:45 AM »

I'm planning on it, but everyone's saying I'm crazy because I'm going to be taking AP english, AP usII, AP euro, french 4, german 2, honors chem, and honors precalc in the same year, with band. People are starting to fear for my sanity. I also get a little compulsive about getting straight As, which might not always be possible next year.
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Re: hunger games or uglies?
« Reply #74 on: May 05, 2012, 10:45:50 AM »

Well, that's one hell of a work load...I offer you my hope you succeed. And yeah, you probably might want to fit SOME free time in there. Lest you end up looking like you got ravanged by a thycoline...
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